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| mcilpuf | Edited version | 1 | Oct 23 2006, 11:48 PM EDT by mcilpuf | ||
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"Burt, are you ready to go?" Glenda asked as she slammed the trunk closed.
She didn't like hiking, but she hoped this would be a fun way to reconnect with her husband of five years. Unfortunately Burt was staring at her as if he thought she'd lost her mind. Hiking was his thing and, even if he thought she was up to something, she was going to give it a try. Glenda bent over to retie her loose shoelace. Burt had given her these cross trainers as a wedding gift. She should have realized then that their wildly divergent interests might cause problems. Glenda was most happy with solitary pursuits like puttering around her home and garden. Burt, on the other hand, was more gregarious and active. He always had to be busy and preferred to have people around him all the time. Glenda knew she drove him crazy and that, on the off chance he wanted to spend an afternoon snuggling on the couch, watching chick flicks with her would be his last choice. "Why are we doing this?" Burt asked as if the last thing he wanted to do was coach his un-athletic wife up a trail on a hot summer afternoon. "Because I love you Burt, and I want to save our marriage," Glenda replied feeling exasperated. When she reached out to touch his arm Burt flinched, like he didn't want any contact with her. Stung, Glenda drew her hand back as tears filled her eyes. Burt shoved his hands in his pockets. She knew he usually melted when she cried so she batted big tears out of her eyes, feeling ashamed of herself for such theatrics. |
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| JessicaRaymond | My edited version | 0 | Oct 21 2006, 7:58 AM EDT by JessicaRaymond | ||
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Thread started: Oct 21 2006, 7:58 AM EDT
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Glenda closed the trunk of the car with a slam. "Burt, are you ready to go?"
She hoped this hike would be a fun way to reconnect with her husband of five years, but right now he just stared at her as though she had lost her mind. He'd told her yesterday that she was crazy to want to go. Hiking had always been his hobby, whereas she'd always been happier in the garden. He didn't seem to understand that she wanted to do this so she could get close to him again. His failure to see this upset her more than she cared to admit. Glenda bent down and tightened up her trainer shoelace. The shoes had been Burt’s gift to her when they got married. She should have realized then that their wildly divergent interests might cause problems. Glenda's love of gardening was due to the fact that it was a solitary pursuit, but then again, Burt occasionally hiked alone if his buddies were busy, so maybe they weren't that different. Oh, who was she kidding? More gregarious and active, Burt always had to be busy. He had never been bone-idle, and he preferred to have people around him at all times if possible. Sometimes Glenda just wanted to spend an afternoon snuggling with him on the couch in front of a movie, but whenever they tried, Burt coughed and fidgeted until, rather despondently, she gave him permission to leave. "Look, I don’t know why we’re doing this," Burt said as he climbed into the driver's seat. "It's going to be a hot afternoon and I'm not sure you're cut out for this." "That's as may be, Burt, but I love you and I want to save our marriage," Glenda replied quietly. She reached out to touch his arm. Burt flinched. He moved his arm away and turned the key in the ignition. Stung by his distance, Glenda's hand fell into her lap and tears filled her eyes. She batted them away, ashamed by her theatrics. Burt sighed and switched the engine off. She knew that despite everything that was wrong between them, he hated to see her cry. |
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